Saturday, December 17, 2011

Do You Think This Is A Sad Biography ?

It's ok, but you need to make more of an ending for it, it doesnt really wrap up. Also you say Kappa waaaay too much. You can use the word he for some of the times, since its clear who you are talking about. You can also make a couple longer sentences and use( he also, or as well as) ... like that , you understand?

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